We had our first draft videos shown to a music video director and he gave our video some positives and negatives which I think are very useful in helping us decide how we want to complete our music video. We took his points into consideration and worked on our video some more to make it the best that we can.
'LOVE the POV stuff - that’s really current at the moment, great way of adding interest on a budget. Take out the black flashes around 1 minute. They’re distracting - the piece has a really nice feel that’s easy to get lost in. The black flashes draw attention to the editing process. The time-lapse and POV content make for a really honest and almost documentary-esque feel - very nice. The narrative needs to end: Does she go back to sleep? Give the narrative a nice circular structure. It almost feels like a complete day in the life, make sure it’s rounded off at the end. If she can’t shoot any more, end on a time-lapse of the sun setting perhaps. Something's a little garish about the vocal performance - maybe hide with a black and white grade?'